Sunday, August 14, 2011

Haunting..

Standing right beside you today, this very day
In reality, who knows, can be miles away
One story and other and other piling up without your consent
He gonna take it all away, just when you least expect
A conspiracy of the odds, where you poor helpless soul is being greedily dragged


An ecstatic odyssey with no specific beginning and end
Caged in some abattoir you feel, lost, nowhere to go, abandoned
Piercing and blazing right through your soul, he still stands there, unabashed
Evil, seeing everything turning out just the way he wanted, cackled,
Is it solely his fault, who knows, or perhaps, he is equally slaughtered! 


P.S: I tried this dark mysterious stuff first time ever. It's not that I'mma upset or something, instead I just wanted to experiment a different forte. Will be eagerly waiting for your views/criticisms.
Check out, "Sweet Sacrifice" by "Evanescence"
Have a good one, mates! :)

27 comments:

  1. I love Evanescence and I loved THIS!=D

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  2. Though it's dark but the expression is superb...You're getting better day by day...I love your choice of words.

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  3. I loved each line of this piece...

    Just revisit again and I think you may want to give one more finishing touch :)

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  4. @ Ezazi: Evanescence, especially Amy Lee, \m/ :)
    Thank you girlie :)

    Love, Risha :)

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  5. @ Priyanka: Thank you milady ;)
    (In your style)

    Love, Risha :)

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  6. @ LauraX: Thnka you so much for droppin by :)

    Love Risha :)

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  7. @ Rosette Princess: Thank you :)

    Love, Risha :)

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  8. @ Saru Di: *Sigh of Relief* I'm so so glad you liked it. I love your poems like anything too :)

    Love, Risha :)

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  9. @ Hemant: Thank you and Umm.. Happy I-Day, was that something you were referring to?

    If not, please lemme know, where I went wrong, I'll appreciate it :)

    Love, Risha :)

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  10. @ My Soul's Journey: Thank you for reading :)

    Love, Risha :)

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  11. @ Muhammad Israr: Thank you so much :)

    Love, Risha :)

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  12. Throughout the post, you make me believe that the one standing there is not good, inflicting harm on her, not caring one bit. And then, you dash all my viewpoint to pieces with the last line. What if he's as devastated as she is, maybe even more.

    Beautiful post, keep writing, exploring new dimensions. A beautiful venture.

    Cheers,
    Blasphemous Aesthete

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  13. @BA: Exactly! Wow, I loved the way you took it. Thank you so very much for your words. Keep coming back!

    Love, Risha :)

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  14. 'I'm haunted' is all I've got ;)

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  15. @ Ayu: I like your effort to understand my poems :)

    Love, Risha :)

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  16. It really is an effort for me :)
    Actually I feel jealous ;) coz I just cannot pen down a single couplet :(

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  17. I know sweetheart, but you do amazing with the articles part!
    And I'm sure gonna do good in poems too, try it sometime and surprise me! :)

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  18. "Or perhaps he is equally slaughtered", the last line stole the show. :)

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  19. The last line won me...
    There is nothing like white and dark, I believe, it's just a shade of grey..
    the pain, and the addiction of it, go together

    aJ

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  20. @MSL: Twas meant to do that :)
    Thank you!

    Love, Risha :)

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  21. @ aJ: Indeed. For a coin always has two sides, right! Thank you :)

    Love, Risha :)

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